A poem based upon Merlin’s advice to King Arthur not to marry Guinevere, warning him that she would prove unfaithful bringing Camelot to ruin.
Shall a pale shadow,
and she a ghost, a phantom
cost so valiant a king,
whose heart will hold by the promise,
and break it with beguiling.
She will betray you with her kiss.
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Arms that will hold you,
eyes that have encaptured your own,
in another’s arms entwined
making warm with passion the place,
where is no promise to bind,
sweetly dying in the embrace.
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Chivalry begone,
with chasing from the kingdom,
Camlan’s field will be the site.
The question Guinevere shall pose,
wild the cherry she will bite,
will bitter you too in the throes.
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Was it Caliburn
taken up for the kingdom
that had brought the victory?
or was it honour which prevailed?
the true cause we may now see,
then cast away the sword that failed.
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Oh Valiant heart!
will be for a shadow pale
pierced through with lady’s arrow,
when she has made you cuckold
then Albion’s race shall know
for Guinevere’s bed were they sold.
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Mist that lays across
not only lake but the realm
now veils from our eye the view,
that noble, which made you great.
Then find your strength in virtue
victory shall not be late.
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This is a different take on Arthurian poetry! Nice!
Hee Bobby, I submitted it to a forum where it is being s-l-a-u-g-h-t-e-r-e-d by the intellectuals, ol’ Suz has gotten her sleeves rolled up for this one, and I’m hitting below the belt and biting a few knees while I’m down there. the stories of Guinevere’s infidelity spring mostly from the 14th century and were greatly elaborated on in the 19th century. But there was always a question as to whether her abduction by Mordred was entirely unwilling. My inspiration came mostly from Merlins dire warnings to the king about his taking Guinevere to wife, he predicted that the ruin of the kingdom would be the result.
hey, it’s always lovely to see you
I like it, so I do. Wonderful, Suz.
Suz…here are a couple of poetry blogs/forums you might fancy:
“Poets Who Blog”
(http://poetswhoblog.blogspot.com/)
Young American Poets
(http://youngamericanpoets.blogspot.com/)
extravagantly gallant! couldn’t like it better, GD.
off to poke a lil’ here and there to add you some more hits if you concern ;-P
Thanks Celt and I’ll check those links-stay sweet now
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Baba if you truly like it I don’t care what the intellectuals say-I like your new smart look
Absolutely wonderful Suz,
. This is great. I was captivated by the first stanza, most especially.
There you are! Jane, I love your blog very much.thanks for stopping by
Hmm … one word: bravo!
Bravolicious THERE you are as the Irish say, “the top of the morning to you”
I have never thought myself an intellectual, so it’s safe for me to say, I enjoyed the poem very much. Keep it up. You are obviously talented and passionate.
IB
Halloo, I’m very pleased to meet you, thanks for kind words on a cold, cold day
Greatings,
Not enought information
Thank you
Jinny
oh, The poem does kind of assume that the reader is conversant with the Arthurian legend and knows all about Guinevere’s infidelity. The poem is more concerned with Merlin’s advice to the king that she would bring Camelot to nought by breaking the code of honour which was the undergirding strength of the realm than the infidelity itself, i.e virtue rather than the sword [excalibur or caliburn] “find your strength in virtue.”
Thank you for your visit, have a nice day.
Hello. This is David Weinglas from the YAP site mentioned above. We have just begun our second year online and welcome submissions from poets born on or after July 20, 1969, from all 50 states, the District of Columbia, Puerto Rico and all territories of the United States of America.
Thank you!
Hello and alas! David, I am not American
unless you can make a special dispensation for Winchester Hampshire England. Thanks for visiting though
Hi there! Thanks for your reply. Actually, our good friend Kevin Bacon (not the actor, the poet) edits a blog called Young British Poets (http://youngbritishpoets.blogspot.com). I am sure he would be very happy to read your work!
Best, D.